I know it’s Wednesday, but this is my response to Esther Newton’s Monday Motivations Challenge. This week, we were challenged to write a 50-200 word piece of flash fiction incorporating the following three lines:
He was in love
The glass smashed to the floor
Just how was he going to get out of this one?
And here’s mine:
Love Hurts
He was in love.
At least, that’s how he felt. His heart fluttering in his chest, his eyes dazzled with stars. He staggered with the force of it.
She stood at the bar, oblivious to the strength of his feelings. Her bottom, in short denim shorts, was shapely, and her bosoms, he knew from watching her walk past, were full, with a pleasing bounce.
He felt weak. He tried to lift his drink, but the glass smashed to the floor. Then, incredibly, he followed it, gasping like a stranded fish as he writhed on the sticky carpet, pain running down his arm.
Everything went blurry, but he wasn’t sure why. It was only his fourth drink, for God’s sake! There were faces around him, and all through him love pulsed with a staccato beat, his breath stuck somewhere in his chest. He heard someone say,
‘He’s having a heart attack!’
Oh. So it wasn’t love. He should have known better, really, a man of his age. He thought briefly of his long-suffering Enid, waiting at home. He’d told her he was going bowling, another lie in a layer of years.
Just how was he going to get out of this one?
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If you’d like to enter the challenge, you have until the end of the week, so head over to Esther’s blog and add your link 🙂
Helen Glynn Jones 
This was great!
Thanks, Ritu! 🙂
Brilliant. Loved it Helen.
Thanks, Miriam! Hope you’re well and that Spring is on its way 🙂
Slowly but surely 🙂
Nice twist in this one. Loved it.
Thanks Craig – it was fun to write. The twist surprised me as well, to be honest 😀
Wow. That was a great take on the prompts. The twists kept coming!
Thank you! I wasn’t sure exactly where it was going myself, at first 😀
Haha, this is great.
😉 Thanks, Angelika
I really enjoyed this. Great use of the three sentence prompts. A fantastic and thoroughly entertaining twist too 🙂
Hi Esther – sorry, I missed this comment, for some reason it didn’t show up in the notifications! Thanks so much, I’m really pleased you enjoyed it – you do set some excellent writing challenges 🙂
Thanks, Helen. I loved your take on the sentences 🙂
Thanks, Esther 🙂
This is excellent, Helen! But it couldn’t be anything else, if you are writing it… well done!
*blushing* Thanks Ali, high praise coming from a writer like you 😊 really glad you liked it xx
As a man of a certain age – quite sobering! Seriously though I thoroughly enjoyed your take on Esther’s challenge. Eric.
Thanks so much, Eric 🙂 Hope I didn’t freak you out too much!
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