Writing A Query Letter to a Literary Agent

As you may be aware, I’ve recently achieved a long-term goal of mine to sign with a literary agent, the fabulous Laura Bennett at the Liverpool Literary Agency. And so, I thought, it might be time for a ‘How I Got My Agent’ post. But I’ve sat down to write the post several times and each time it’s been different, from a lengthy run-down of my journey through querying to a list of bullet points about putting together a pitch package.

The path to representation and publication is different for every author – some get picked up on their first book, whereas others, like myself, query multiple books for years before achieving their goal. However, one thing that every author needs to write is a query letter. I’ve written many of them over the years, as well as attending a workshop at Bloomsbury Publishing on how to craft the perfect agent letter, so hopefully I might have something useful to impart. So here are some pointers, using excerpts from the query letter that got me a full request and, eventually, an offer of representation, as an example:

Dear Laura

The opening. I address the agent by name. This may seem like basic stuff but apparently some people still like to use Dear Sir or Madam, or simply Dear Agent, if they’re sending out lots of letters. Don’t do this. Even though it may seem like a pain, each agent needs to be approached individually.

I am seeking representation for my fantasy novel, The City of Wings and Gold, complete at 99,800 words.

Short and to the point. I’ve set out what I’m looking for, my novel genre, title and word count. It’s not my debut, as I already have several novels published, but you can add that if it is, in fact, your first book you’re querying. Also, quick note – make sure that your word count is suitable for your genre. There are lots of online lists of genre word counts if you’re unsure.

For three centuries Raktiri warriors have defended the City Circles. Sons and daughters of the City elite, they are the noblest of their kind. And also the most merciless. Seren Goldenhand wants nothing to do with them, or the death they bring.

Then a dying woman gives Seren a bracelet. If she takes it off, she dies. If she refuses to transform into a Raktiri, she dies.

But Seren is a healer, sworn to the goddess, not a winged warrior. And the dead woman has left more questions than answers. Brought to the heart of a glittering city, Seren finds darkness waiting, a price to be paid.

And a healer must become a killer, in order to survive. 

The blurb. This is basically like the blurb you’d read on the back of a published book – it needs to set up the main premise and character, and hint at the conflict to be resolved. It’s different from the synopsis, which is a separate document and needs to list all the main plot points of your story from beginning to end.

The City Of Wings and Gold is an adult fantasy with crossover potential to the upper end of YA. It’s a fresh look at a post-cataclysmic world, set in an alternative future London. The society is one of faith and magic, gods and mystery, yet still holds echoes of our own. It has the slow-burn romance of The Wolf and the Woodsman, by Ava Reid, echoes the wintry fairy-tale feel of Naomi Novik’s Spinning Silver, and explores themes of enemies-to-lovers, family, love and loss. While it draws on Celtic, rather than Norse traditions, it will also appeal to readers of The Witch’s Heart, by Genevieve Gornichet.

More information about the book I’m querying. I’ve talked about the story a little more, about the genre, themes and setting, as well as providing comp titles. I used to find comps a really difficult thing to do, until I saw an agent say that they don’t have to be a direct comparison to your book; rather, comps can hold a similar element to your story, or a feeling that you’d like to convey, thereby giving the agent an idea as to where your book might sit in the marketplace. It’s also important that your comps are titles from recent years.

I’ve been writing for several years, and have sold several short stories to anthologies and literary journals. I’ve also self-published six novels, all of which have been well-reviewed, selling over 1000 copies, and am currently working on several new ideas. I recently wrote a middle-grade novel with the singer, Tom Grennan, for which we are also seeking representation.

And finally, a little bit about me, and any relevant information. For example, if you’re writing a book about the sea, and spent several years as a sailor, that’s information an agent will be interested in, as is any publication history, and whether or not you’re working on anything else. They don’t need to know that your beta readers loved it or your mum thinks it’s as good as Harry Potter. This is a business letter, after all, with the aim of making your book as attractive as possible to the agent reading it. The only other thing you might want to add is whether or not you’ve talked to that agent before, via a 121 or conference, if they’ve liked your pitch on Twitter or similar, or if you’ve been recommended to contact them through an industry contact.

I hope you enjoy reading the attached material, and look forward to hearing from you.

The ending. Short and sweet. Again, this is a business letter. Be professional and approach this as you would approach anyone you were asking for work.

And there you have it. A query letter needs to be mainly about your book, and why you think it will be a good fit for this particular agent. Keep it concise, keep it professional, and remember to address the agent by name. And, if you are heading into the querying trenches, good luck!

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A Season For Querying

A while back, inspired by a comment a fellow writer made, I wrote a post about how there are seasons in writing. A season for editing, a season for publishing, a season for drafting, etc. Much as fields are left fallow and crops rotated, concentrating on one aspect at a time of the writing journey is something I’ve found helpful when improving my craft.

All this is a long way of saying I’m about to start querying again. By that, I mean I have a shiny new book, beta-read and edited within an inch of its life, that I’m sending out to agents in the hope that one might take me on.

The querying season is one of varying weather, I’ve found. The spring-like hopefulness of the beginning, where days are brighter, the possibility of warmer weather lying ahead. This is how it feels when query letters are sent out, small birds leaving the nest, hoping to find their place. There are also stormy days and dark days when rejections roll in or, worse yet, your query is completely ignored, languishing unacknowledged in someone’s deleted file. And then there are brilliant days, when the sun shines bright and all seems well with the world, when you get personalised feedback, a request for more information, or even a request for the full manuscript.

I’ve weathered all those different days on my writing journey, and I’m still here. I think my latest book is one of the best I’ve written, and there are more stories from the same universe revealing themselves as I write. Not bad for something that started with a fragment of a dream.

This querying season, I’m hoping for more sunshine than clouds. I’ll keep you all posted 🙂

Update: I wrote this post last week, after sending out my first batch of queries. And, sunshine already, I’ve already had a full request! Watch this space…


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On The Path Once More


It’s Monday, and the gorgeous child is back at school. Half term is over – this year is flying by already – and I’m now back to my regular schedule.

A Thousand Rooms is now starting to go out to agents and publishers. I have a carefully crafted cover letter, a sweated-over synopsis, and have had the first three chapters professionally critiqued (thanks, Esther!). I’m also getting very strong feedback on the finished manuscript from my lovely, lovely beta readers – thank you to each and every one of you for your time and honest words.

I managed to get it out the door to three agents last week. One has already got back to me, with a rejection. Ouch. But that is the game I am in, the ring I have now entered, and so I must duck and weave and armour myself against the slings and arrows of rejection, for I doubt it will be the last. I read somewhere that if you get rejected more than ten times, it’s your manuscript that’s the problem. Honestly, I think ten is far too low a number – The Help was rejected something like sixty times, to cite just one example. I think Harry Potter was knocked back at least a dozen times, to cite another. So I have a list of agents and publishers to approach before I decide to go it alone. I believe in the story and, with the feedback I’m getting, hope that it will get somewhere.

Hills and Valleys remains in the editing stage, but I’m still hoping to publish next month. There is a cover design to finalise, then the whole formatting thing to go through again.

And finally, I’ve decided to take advantage of my free KDP Days and am offering Oak and Mist free to download until February 25th. I’ve offered it for free once before with positive results and, while I’m not a fan of giving work away, I do believe these short promotions have their benefits. In fact, I blogged about it here and here.

Wishing you all a Happy Monday x

Live In Hope

Even on a rainy day you sometimes get a rainbow. Too cheesy? ;-)

Even on a rainy day you sometimes get a rainbow. Too cheesy? 😉

The other day I received a rejection letter. It was fine, as they go. It addressed me by name, offered the vague yet slightly hopeful response that my story ‘wasn’t what they were looking for at the moment,’ and reminded me to format future submissions in standard manuscript format (which, to be honest, seems to change from submission to submission). It was just for a short story I’d sent to a magazine, a long shot to be honest and I hadn’t really been expecting much from it. So again, fine.

And yet, not. It really hurt, in an ow-y punch to the gut kind of a way. And I couldn’t really figure out why. I mean, it’s not my first rejection letter. But it is the first one I’ve received in a while. And then I realised that it had brought it all back to me. How it felt last summer when I was riding the submission train, living in hope only to have another letter, another email, dash my expectations to the ground. I wasn’t such a nice person for a little while – at least I felt I wasn’t, though perhaps no-one noticed. I did have a couple of requests for the full manuscript and some lovely responses from other agents, but they led nowhere in the end.

It is part of being a writer, they say. And of course it is. Just like one star reviews and people who get cross and launches that fizzle to nothing. The key is to persevere, they say, and I get that too. But that little rejection threw me. I realise I’m a bit emotional at the moment. I’m having some health stuff sorted over the next few weeks (which may mean I won’t blog as often for a little while) and that’s freaking me out. So perhaps that added to the intensity of my response.

But I am getting ready to re-board the train. I have a book called A Thousand Rooms that is nearly finished and that I hope to start submitting soon. Another summer marred by rain and rejection? I hope not 🙂 I shall gather my British optimism with regards to the capricious nature of both agents and the weather, and I shall live in hope. Because that’s part of being a writer too.